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29040 No. 29040 ID: 5d84e8

-llo? Is anyone there? Hello? Are there any disembodies voices in my head? Can you hear me? I hope that the spell didn't go awry...
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No. 29042 ID: 5d84e8

My name is Alyssa Dreadnacht, Daughter of RavenQuen Dreadnacht the Duchess of the Underworld commander of 42 legions of Daemons. I have summoned you, voices, to help me in some...personal matters.
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No. 29044 ID: 3e32fe

>>29042
Ok. We're disembodied voices. What are the personal matters? Wait... let me guess... it's to do with love interests, right?
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No. 29045 ID: 5d84e8

((I can't draw very well, so there will be no pictures. Sorry...))
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No. 29048 ID: 5d84e8

Y-yes...You see, there is this boy...He's been very kind to me ever since Elementary School where he chased off this bully. I...have been spending much time with him, but I do not know how to approach my feelings with him.
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No. 29049 ID: 649108

Hey, sup? Got any dresses? You should put one on. You got any close family?
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No. 29050 ID: 5d84e8

He seems to try to keep to himself most of the time, but I sometimes watch him from a distance.
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No. 29051 ID: 3e32fe

>>29048
We're nobility, right? Tell me is there any big event like a ball or a dance or some meeting of big wigs? What's this boy's social status and class status? Do you have any classy/hot dresses?
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No. 29060 ID: 5d84e8

I have many dresses...They are what I usually wear, but I worry that they are not to his tastes...I wear what is described as the Gothic Lolita style. I think it suits me better than any of the clothes that my relatives send me. My immediate family is my mother, RavenQuen, and my father, Leonard. My grandparents are William and Beatrice Dreadnacht on my father's side, Eclipse and Cantible on my mother's side. Nobility? I guess you were referring to my mother's title. Well...I live in the human world with my mother and father, with my grandparents close by. My mother decided to retire from being a Super Villain when she met my father, who was the son of her Arch Nemesis. You see, I live in a world where what you call Superheroes and Super villains exist. My mother still keeps her title in the underworld, as well as her legions of Daemons. They work as servants in my house, as well as guard over me against those who wish me harm. I do not have what you may call "Classy" or "Hot" dresses, but my mother is trying to get me to become a seductress and has offered to lend me her own dresses. They are...definitely "Classy" to say the least. Perhaps she expects me to continue leading her legions...
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No. 29065 ID: 5d84e8

H-hello? Are you all still there? I-I know that my problems are really quite trivial but...
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No. 29066 ID: 3e32fe

>>29060
Huh. Is the boy also a relation to a superhero or a villain?
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No. 29067 ID: 5d84e8

Umm...Not that I know of. His parents and family are actually quite Anti-Supers in general. His personal opinions, though, are extremely neutral bordering on apathy. He can live with Supers but he prefers to keep out of their inner workings.
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No. 29068 ID: 3e32fe

>>29067
Okay does he know you are related to a Super? Also how old are you and he?
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No. 29073 ID: 5d84e8

Yes, he knows that I am related to a former Super Villain and to a Retired Hero. He is around the same age as I am, 16 years old.
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No. 29079 ID: 3e32fe

>>29073
And you go to te same school, right? Tell me do you have any powers?
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No. 29083 ID: 5d84e8

The both of us go to the same school. It's one of the new schools that accepts Heroes, Villains, and Those who do not have powers.

As for my powers...I can barely do magic. I was not sure if this spell would even work in the first place. I am subjected to scheduled tests that try to find any latent powers that I may have from my Mother's side. My grandfather was one of the "Mundane Heroes" that need special equipment that allow them to fight crime.
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No. 29085 ID: 5d84e8

I AM sensitive to the occult and magical influences though...
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No. 29094 ID: 5d84e8

It may be why this spell worked...
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No. 29111 ID: 5d84e8

((I shall be away from the computer for a while...Please post and please stay tuned...))
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No. 29217 ID: ddd49b

Umm...So I would like some help in trying to make him fall in love with me...I do not know what to do...I want to confess to him, but I am afraid it may ruin my friendship with him...
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No. 29218 ID: ddd49b

W-will you be able to help me, voices?
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No. 29219 ID: 649108

The fastest way to a man's heart is through his stomach. Try to find out what foods he likes. Stalk him if you have to. Remember, guys did obsessive chicks.
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No. 29220 ID: ddd49b

O-okay! I-I already know what he likes best...I'll try to make some chocolate for him. It's not hard to do so. Hmm...He also likes his laptop as well. He's always typing on it. I am sort of curious about what is in it.
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No. 29221 ID: 6d4c58

>>29220
>He also likes his laptop as well. He's always typing on it. I am sort of curious about what is in it.

Trust me thats something you may not want to find out
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No. 29222 ID: ddd49b

O-okay...Is there anything else I could try? He does not really socialize with other people...He usually tries to find a quiet place to type on his laptop. His latest spot is in the school library. He also passes by my house on the way, even though it is slightly out of his way to do so. We do not really talk though...
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No. 29233 ID: ddd49b

I also see that he seems to be a bit more...private lately. He does not interact with anyone at all anymore, and he looks more...tired lately.
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No. 29236 ID: ddd49b

...ANyway...I'll just find my way into the kitchen and-

>Oh, Alyssa! Do you need anything?
It's my father, Leonard Dreadnacht. He is a normal human who married my mother. His father was my mother's Nemesis, so it gets a bit strained when Grandfather William comes to visit.

>I-I just wanted to make some chocolate for tomorrow as a snack...Is there any cocoa left?
>Of course Aly, you know we always keep a few containers somewhere around here. It's pretty much the only way I can bribe Eligor to leave me alone with your mother. Here.
My father hands me several containers of chocolate as well as some toffee bits.
>They add some flavor to the chocolate. I recommend cookies if you want to give them to someone.
>F-father?
>Oh, I know that you are at that age. When your mother was your age...Well, that is another story...

Too much information for me...I am taking my father's advice and am baking chocolate and toffee cookies. Anything else you recommend Voices?
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No. 29245 ID: ddd49b

((I gotta go now...Please Stay tuned and post...))
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No. 29391 ID: a3b36a

Hmm... your mother is wanting you to be a seductress? Hm... you might be able to do so without a change of style, if you find the right circles of people to mingle with. Lots of guys dig the 'mysterious shy magic girl'. If you wanted to go the villainy route, you could leave a trail of broken hearted men pining for you after you're gone. Both heroic and villainous routes have the 'dark mysterious magician' role established. ...don't think there's many roles involving the 'gothic lolita' look, though. Might fit into the aforementioned role quite well.

As for this young man of yours... does he know how you feel? It may be going against some social norms, but being the one to do the asking is a viable option.

You seem quite shy and unsure, in just this conversation anyways. It may take you gathering courage and doing something rash and potentially embarassing. You could probably run off to let your emotions cool down afterward. ...his emotions, I have no idea what would happen. Depends on the person.

As for that laptop of his... if you sneak a peek at some of the stuff he works on, reads, or looks at, you might get a bit of insight on how he is when he's pretty sure nobody's looking. Be prepared for a shock, but it might not actually happen. He might just really enjoy computers.

But, I ramble. Anything else you might like to share about yourself, Alyssa?
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No. 29399 ID: ddd49b

Ah! I-I-I d-don't know i-if he knows h-how I feel about him. He m-mostly does not mind if I hang around near him, b-but he gets defensive when I try l-look at his laptop...

W-well...I can describe myself...I-I am slightly short for my age, with a lean build, and pale complexion. I usually wear my long, raven-colored hair in a pair of pig-tails on both sides of my head. My eyes are a-amber colored, inherited from my Mother's family.

The school day is divided into several blocks. I only have three classes out of eleven with S-Stephen, the boy I l-like. I take the five normal classes: Math, Science, English, History, and a Foreign Language. Then, I have Occult Class, Strategy Class, Computer Class, Self-Defense Class, a free block, and Home Economics...I have Strategy, Self-Defense, and English class with S-Stephen. He does not look like he pays attention in classes, but he earns high grades, sometimes even higher than the Meta-Humans, the politically correct term for Supers, who specialize in Intelligence...He really does not have any super powers to my knowledge, he gets special tests periodically just like the other normal students.
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No. 29400 ID: ddd49b

S-Stephen is taller than some of the other boys his age, with a lean build and an extremely light tan. He has shoulder-length, black hair that barely covers his bright blue eyes. He needs to wear silver, thin-framed glasses, I assume from using his computer too many times.
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No. 29405 ID: ddd49b

I-I will go to sleep now...I will try to give him the cookies tomorrow on the way to school...
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No. 29416 ID: ddd49b

Ah, it's morning...I feel really nervous right now...H-he's going to be passing by my house anytime now...Ah, the cookies!

I rush down to the kitchen and check the refrigerator. Luckily, they were not eaten. Okay...So I'm going to go outside to wait for him...Any suggestions on what to do Voices?
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No. 29426 ID: d5b2d6

God fucking damn it man.
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No. 29427 ID: ddd49b

((I gotta go...Please post...))
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No. 29474 ID: ddd49b

Ah! H-he's coming this way...

>Good Day...
>...
I wish I could greet him back...I hold out the bag of cookies to him and turn my face away, not wanting him to see my blush. He takes them and pockets them...It kind of makes me sad when he did that...We walk towards school in silence, with the gentle clicking on his keyboard filling in the background. It feels nice just being next to him alone...

>Hey Steve!
>Hello...
The person that just greeted us is Rachael Hawkins, the daughter of Lt. Hawk, a Superhero from the Aves planet. She flies in from the sky and begins to talk to Stephen.

>Do ya have the files dude?
>*Sigh*...Fine.
Stephen hands her a flash drive. She often asks him to do research for her on certain villain groups, and he often complies. His information is extremely detailed, sometimes even better than the police. I wonder where he gets it from.

I kind of feel jealous of Rachael and Stephen's relationship. They are neighbors, and have known each other since they were around four or five years old. Rachael is currently trying to convince Stephen to form a superhero team with her.
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No. 29490 ID: ddd49b

Ah! They moved at a quicker pace than mine...What should I do? I do not want to interrupt their conversation, but...

((I gotta go now...Please post...))
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No. 29495 ID: 6d4c58

>>29490
I am sorry but I will be honest your quest doesn't interest me in the least. You have good grammer, good spelling, but these are not things that make a good quest in order to make a writen quest work you need good discriptions and need to focus more on telling a story emerse the posters in a world rather than interacting with posters. It seems like a weak fanfic.

However I am not the person to sage and critisize another person with out offering them a means to improve upon themselves.
http://suptg.thisisnotatrueending.com/archive.html?tags=Heroes
Check out the true hero quests they were a tet adventure done right (aside from blatent weeabooism)it had good description and intreging story and romance. Hope it helps.
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No. 29571 ID: ddd49b

((Umm...Thanks? I don't mean to sound sarcastic. It will really help, thank you.))
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No. 29574 ID: d5b2d6

Your quest doesn't interest me in the least, and it's not because of immersion, I barely read any of it. But what I did read tells me that it's everything I've _already seen_ in ReaverQuests©. It's overdone, uninteresting and it's quests like this that encourage the retardation that spreads into other perfectly good quests. I'm sorry, but stick to the quest you already have. This one is Bad News.
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No. 29578 ID: ddd49b

((Ah well...I was being very uncreative. It's true...But if I used my original idea, it would have turned out a tad too close to my pre-existing quest...))
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No. 29579 ID: 9a71e2

>>29578
Then attend to your other quests.
Quality over quantity.
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